Book Review (Infinity Formula by Steven V.S.)- Monday Madness

I have reviewed this book before, but I did not post it here. The author made some edits and asked if I would consider giving it another look. I did and here is what I think.

The Infinity Formula by Steven VS

The Infinity Formula by Steven VS

Although you can tell that a great amount of editing took place, I still feel it could use more work. This truly has so much potential. It could easily become one of my favorites. However, as I said there has been a great amount of editing, so I will be changing the previously given three stars to four.

Some of the chapters still need more structure and some of the ideas still do not quite fit together. I did notice that most of the useless descriptions were taken out and additional information was given for things that are more necessary.  

The specific example I gave below was not only fixed but had a few things added that gave it some oomph!

*Below is my original review. The edits Steven made helped make this book much more captivating and he does deserve the bump in the star level.  

This book is good and has the potential to be great. Here is the deal, the storyline is a solid idea it is the actual writing that I feel needs help. In addition, I think the placement of ideas needs work too. The individual chapters need a little more…structure? I think that is the word I am looking for.

Often things that were completely useless were described and then we were given little to no information on more important matters (I should add I do not mean it was held back for suspense, just flat out did not describe things.) The phrasing and ideas within the book often jumped from place to place. Almost as if the author had so many good ideas, he could not decide which to put in and so he added both. I also noticed that subject pronouns were used at inappropriate times making it difficult to understand exactly who he was talking about. For example, this is taken from the beginning of the book (it is from the second chapter, not a spoiler).

“The gunshot rang.

Lily…

He pushed her to the ground, covering her. He was shouting at him, but he couldn’t hear, the crowd had erupted into a frenzy…”

Someone, please tell me who was shouting at whom? Even if the author meant to say she instead of he that still shows the need for some more editing. Anyway, as you can tell from that little blurb it really is an action packed book. I honestly would like to see this book worked on more and republished as it really has so much to work with.

That is my honest opinion.

As always, keep reading.

Ta, ta

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